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When we arrived, you told me
As we waited on the bus
"The best week of your life is here."
I didn't believe you.

But at that one evening practice, you told me
As I staggered on the field
"It's better to sit out now."
I didn't believe you.

Afterwards, you told me
As I winced in pain
"I'm carrying you to the clinic."
I didn't believe you.

In the clinic you told me
As you handed me your own knee brace
"You're not going to march tomorrow."
I didn't believe you.

The next day, you told me
As I paced on the sideline
"Sit down; you'll be out for the rest of the week."
I didn't believe you.

That night, you told me
As you held me in your arms
"I'd do anything for you."
I didn't believe you.

When I laid there lifeless, you told me
As the agony took my strength
"I love you."
I didn't believe you.

In the midst of the heartbreak, you told me
As I cried myself to sleep
"You are so brave."
I didn't believe you.

The next week, you told me
As we marched onto the football field
"Don't push it- you're making me worried."
I didn't believe you.

After the show, you told me
As we limped out of the stadium
"Just worry about yourself- I'm fine."
I didn't believe you.

Later, you told me
As we walked hand in hand
"No matter what, it all pays off in the end."
I believed you.

~M

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This poem is about a person who is very special to me, who always guides me through my pain. I owe him everything... and I should have believed him all those times. :)

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*Catluckey Oct 30, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
Absolutely beautiful! I'm glad you believe him now! :heart: It takes time to grow in wisdom and love. :hug:
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~thepigang314 Oct 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
true words :)
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*Catluckey Oct 30, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
:nod::rose:
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~2by3Artist Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I tend to give very detailed critique but since this is so personal, I'm afraid to do so. Are you just looking for whether people recognize the emotions and like it in general or are you wanting to know what works and what doesn't so you can work a revision or at least apply feedback to future works? Your love for the person who plays this special role in your life is evident and the drawing is sweet. Send me a note if you'd like more feedback than that. I'd appreciate your looking at my work, Angry Totem Tiki Mandala to offer your critique, as well. I welcome constructive criticism in feedback comments or by note.
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:iconhgiahb:
aww... this is so sad, and beautiful, and then happy, I've always wished to have someone that would say things like that to me, be happy that you have that, and believe, even if it is a risk to do so
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~thepigang314 Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you for your kind words :)
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~thisheartwillconquer Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're a fantastic writer and artist :)
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~thepigang314 Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you very much. :)
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~thisheartwillconquer Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
anytime
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~Mizukiida Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
aww that is such a sweet poem ^^
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