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fantastic rhyming!!!
like this a lot
This piece tells of quite a lot of emotion! Your ideas here are quite good. The doubtful and questioning tones of this piece are expressed very clearly. Your introduction was well composed as well, since it sets a mood that many readers can relate to.
My only suggestion would be to make the 15 as a written out "fifteen."
Keep up the good work!
*TheFinalHikari
Founder of #Writers--club, #LandoftheSky, and #Live-Love-Write
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